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Post by Maverick on Sept 8, 2017 13:38:26 GMT -6
Here are some disclaimers before you go commenting
1. It is shorter than the first one, reasoning for it is that I don't want to narrate what happens every day so the last few days were left out to a shorter version.
2. Reason for Bobby Barratt's inclusion in the solo promo is something I had done to continue the heat me and Bobby had in the first of both our roleplays.
Anything else you want to comment on? Please do tell me
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Post by Bobby Barratt on Sept 8, 2017 16:15:10 GMT -6
This one started pretty well, but towards the end it felt a little like you were trying to pad the word count a little. Jumping from place to place and not doing much. Like turning up to the training camp and talking to chaos. it would be good to see what about, or if its relevant. Just that and the font size, which seems to change a bit, but still a million miles ahead of where you were 2 weeks ago!
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Post by Maverick on Sept 8, 2017 16:20:13 GMT -6
The font thing changes just is not my doing, the fucking website does that all the time and I don't know why
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Post by Bobby Barratt on Sept 8, 2017 16:22:15 GMT -6
That's really strange. Ah well. Just the padding at the end then Like I said you've improved a ton lately though. Keep at it!
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Post by Maverick on Sept 8, 2017 16:25:02 GMT -6
I know the end was a bit shitty. It wasn't rushed or anything. There was just no more thoughts to get into it
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Post by Bobby Barratt on Sept 8, 2017 17:11:26 GMT -6
Yeah it just came across like you threw it in there to make the roleplay bigger. You could always pick one of those, like what did you speak to chaos about? He might have okayed you using him.
Just an idea. Feel free to tell me to piss off lol.
Feck
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Chaos Kid
Opening Match Guy
Ironman Champion/Tag Team Champion
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Post by Chaos Kid on Sept 8, 2017 17:19:55 GMT -6
MAverick did pm about using me, but as I was away from the computer at the time I didn't see until hours after the message was sent to me, and I did agree with him using me in his promo, however I was too late sending him the message as he had already posted it
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Post by Bobby Barratt on Sept 9, 2017 0:18:01 GMT -6
Ah yeah, been there done that lol. I'm murder for missing messages on here.
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